Always, your princess
When you tell me how cute I used to be
it hurts
how I used to be your princess
but no longer seem to be
I wish you could see that
I still am your princess
or at least that I want to be
I try so hard to be good to you
even when you're so cruel to me
I can't help that I've grown
but you still seem to blame me
and talk about how good things used to be
when you still thought of me as your princess
Really good emotion, now try to expand the imagery more. What does the hurt feel like- can you describe it more? What sensory details can you add- how are they cruel to you? Paint more pictures for your reader (show, don't tell).
ReplyDeleteGood start, keep working and get me a final draft asap.